Is my story good so far? rest of chapter?

it's good!i'd like to read more. but watch out your tenses. like you write "how nervous i am" i think this should be "how nervous i was". also never try to copy other books. your story reminds me of a mix of harry potter and house of night. maybe the idea of a supernatural finishing school is way overused. but keep trying.you are really good at what you do, just a bit inexperienced :]